could use some work on a few of the rhymes but overall its really cool :D thanks i like reading songs/peoms and stuff ^__^
I like reading other people's work...
I agree with what mazdaaf said...
A few of the rhymes need work, but it's a very good start!
[:)]
OBE
Laying in bed
the dizzness hurting my head
Cant take the buzzing
its surprising
My body stilled
I think Im killed
Im floating out
I cant come out
im stuck between
whats unseen
i move my hand
It comes out
I start to float
out my throat
I see my body
like its somebody
Im feeling afraid
but im not scared
I movee beyond my bedroom window
i see my Neighbor Mr. Findow
Im floating now as you can see
further out to where i have not seen
Im in a place where love is found
I see this is wheree my heart is bound
Im going further deeper deepper
i know this place is a keeper
I see two beings one white and gold
the other green but the other color untold
They say there my Guides from the otherside
Can i beleive them, Or should i backaside
The beings start speaking
i can't understand there talking
I left them while i kept walking
i know there here to help me be
I just cant see why there after me
I find my self back in my room
I start going down to my cacoon
slowly slowly i start to sink
slowly slowly while remembering my trip
I wake up at noon
why did it have to end so soon
was it real or was it dreamed
this mystery will never be seen
that was the day i OBED
its cool :roll: