together we crumble, stumble, and fall

[MisterJingo]

our future together, we weave
from crystal strands, each of which
diffracts the sunlight into rainbow hues,
painting our hopes, dreams and intentions
across our attendant hands.
each new day sees, this structure grow
so that soon, it pierces our clothes, burrows
deeper into our flesh, binding us, into
a single fate – our beating hearts joined,
reverberating, along each rainbow thread.
any movement from others favour, sees
fractures develop, loud cracks – as
our prospective hopes stumble, and
parting, tears our hearts and flesh
causing this ephemeral structure to fail,
break apart, and come crashing to the ground
to reverberate within our aching wounds, and
along the corridors of our (now) separate lives.

[Euphoric Sunrise]

I really like the way you write. Your choice of words and the way you arrange them paints a really pleasant picture.

[MisterJingo]

Thanks . I haven't written for years, but a couple of months back, I had one of those events which make you look at your life and where you are going. I decided I wanted to start writing poetry, and so I did . I definately consider myself a beginner in this, but hopefully i'll improve with time. I've been (unsuccessfully) trying to find some form of writing/poetry course near to where I live to aid me. I have some more poems here:

http://www.thestarlitecafe.com/perl-bin/base/search.cgi?name=misterjingo

They are all rough, first draft, attempts at poetry so most will have very rough edges. But they're great practice.